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Desired Death

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Fade to black
My eyesight dim
My thoughts lack
The strength to win

My head's pounding
My heart's straining
My eye's rounding
My strength's waning

My days are filled
With pain of Death
But I am willed
To suck in breath

I'm lost inside
The maelstrom of life
As I stand besinde
The point of Knife

It's too much for me
I WANT to die
Just leave me be
And don't ask why
This is the other one i want to submit to Echoes across the Bay, but i'm not sure they'll like suicidal poetry. probabally (Is that spelled right?) not.
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finalomega's avatar
Awesome "ABAB" rhyme scheme. The line "The point of Knife" is a little awkward though, probably because it isn't a complete statement. Then again, I see how it would be challenging to fix that line and still keep with the rhythm of the poem.

Dark and depressing, like most suicidal poetry. I like the ending particularly. :clap: Good stuff.